This is a commentary on episode two of Voice of the Witness, which can be found here. Voice of the Witness is a dark, low-fantasy serial I am writing. It is published on Mondays weekly by Calamities Press. This serial is further exploring the world presented in my story Hunt of the Damned, from a much different perspective.
For each episode, I will be writing a commentary and posting it here. In these commentaries, I will give a sort of behind-the-scenes look at what I am trying to do in each installment of the serial and possibly hint at where things are going. I may also give more information about the world in which the story takes place.
Since I typically schedule my blog posts for midnight, these commentaries will often be online several hours before that week’s episode of Voice of the Witness. There may be spoilers. You have been warned. Now that I have that introduction out of the way, I shall begin.
Episode two is not as polished as it could be and I’m willing to admit it. I suppose that’s a risk when keeping myself on a weekly schedule and writing as I go. I didn’t get this one sent off to the Calamities Press editor until the very early hours of Sunday morning. This only serves to encourage me to eventually rewrite Voice of the Witness into a single, longer piece. In ebook form, I’ll probably include these commentaries (and more) as bonus material.
I had originally intended for this episode to make more progress in the story but, once I started writing, it took on more depth than I had anticipated. Many would probably call this being over descriptive but so be it. I ran with it because I felt it emphasized just how big of a deal it was for Zacharia to be leaving the only home he had ever known.
Only one building is discussed in this episode and that’s the dormitory. All those who are part of the Order of the Northern Sea would live in this building. There are different rooms for different genders and ranks within the Order’s hierarchy. In episode three, I want to try to show more of the library. This library, and really all libraries in this setting, are not just a single building filled with books. Instead, libraries are built like castles. They have strong outer walls and multiple buildings within. These libraries are where the people of this world in decline chronicle history, even as it happens. They are also where official records are kept. They even have Guardians, which resemble a knightly order. All of this is by edict of the Last King, which I will touch on a bit more in the future.
Finally, right at the very end of episode two, I introduced another character. His name is Bartholomew and I think people are going to like him. He’ll be like the Samwise Gamgee to Zacharia’s Frodo Baggins. In my mind, I actually see Bart quite a bit like Sam, if Sam were a fighter. I’d draw fewer comparisons between Frodo and Zacharia.
That’s all I have for the moment. I hope you’ll read the next episode of Voice of the Witness on Monday and come back here for my next commentary. If there is anything in particular you would like me to address, let me know in the comments, on Facebook, on Twitter, or via e-mail. Thanks!